Jasper's Writing Contest Entry

MoonFields

| This is amazing!!!
| I love the twists and the ending. Yours is the best imo. :' )

Memm

I've read your story, and to be honest, I'm in loooooove with the story! I loved the details and the choice of words , I simply can't describe how much your are talented and how well is the story written Jas! Truly a spectacular job!

Crystal2780!!

Sheesh!!  This one is going to be a challenge to judge.
On the plus side, you did put your heart into making it.  I love the sensory feels in the opening and the interesting backstory you gave yourself.
Still, I noticed how the storyline took after a disaster movie.  That calm, clear opening with a happy day that turns dark and its aftermath.  The way characters are forced to stick together.  The timeline years later....
I honestly am not sure whether this really fits the qualification of "A day in the life of your fairy or sparrow man".  Yet, I have always been fond of disaster stories.  There are a few typos here and there, yet that is an easy thing to miss when looking back over what has been written.  Your eyes naturally tend to only swoop over the highlights.
Nevertheless, for what you have, WELL DOWN!!  This was an enjoyable read.  However, ~4,000 words is nothing compared to chapters I have completed (some are between 10,000 and 20,000 words).
Overall, I enjoyed this story.  Now, on to the next one....

Jasper

Crystal2780!! replied at 2017-11-28 12:47
Sheesh!!  This one is going to be a challenge to judge.
On the plus side, you did put your heart int ...

Wow thank you so much, I was actually worried you wouldn't like it.

The original copy that I wrote in Microsoft Word had no typos, but something happened with the spacing when I pasted it into this website... I noticed it as well And fixed most of it but I see that a few got left behind.

Also don't worry about it not being a day in my fairy's life, I asked Amethyst before I wrote it if I could go off-prompt a little

Edit: I went through and fixed all the spacing errors that I could find.

Pumpkin

I love it Jasper. It's such a great story.

MidnightEscape

This is so good! Great job!

CelestialNebby

I just... I just... love this story so much. So emotional, so beautiful, so detailed... ;u; You're an amazing writer.. ;w;